Script for voiceover for Mystery

Script for voiceover:

Bradley Hope – Detective Macs Pain
David Leighton – Chief Constable Creedy


Phone rings

‘Macs, Rogue is in town. I need you to keep an eye on him, but whatever you do don’t engage. ‘

‘Boss, this guy is in town and you’re telling me I can’t engage?! He killed Lawrie boss, a good cop!’

‘Macs, don’t get ahead of your self you don’t stand a chance this guy is Lethal’.

‘I’m gonna get him, Lawrie deserves that at least.’

‘I am your commanding officer and you will do as I instruct, I want you to follow him, I want you to watch him but under no circumstances make contact, do I make myself clear or do I have to get Officer Stooge on the job?...

‘No, no Stooge is half the cop I am’

‘I know, that is why I put you on this assignment, there was no other way’.

‘Boss..’

‘I only gave you this because you’re the only one good enough to even keep up with him. If you engage I will take your badge, your gun and your job Macs.’

‘So be it.’

‘What?’

‘Listen to me, Creedy. I’m gonna follow that bastard, just as you asked. I’m gonna follow him, just like you asked, then I’m gonna do the rest. I’m gonna hunt him down, I’m gonna hurt him, and make him bleed, then I’m gonna make him beg. Then I’m gonna kill him. And there ain’t a god damn thing you can do about it.

‘Macs no! I know you were close to Lawrie but…’

‘Save it chief’

Beep

we added this transcript to be said over our film after we got our audience feedback. Seeing our film on the big screen made us realise that we had to add more to our opening sequence. When we saw the opening sequence on the big screen we realised that it needed more and that it wasn't quiet at its potential because the storyline was ambigous with out it.People thought our camera angles/shots were good but we needed to add something else to get the total "wow" factor.

Final Edit

In our final edit we choose to do a voice over because people didnt really understand the storyline,which is why we needed the voiceover.Doing this allowed us too,add ambient sounds such as police sirens this allowed for the people to feel suspense in all i think we have done a good job in our final edit i think it reflects our ability.I think we reflected the neo noir genre well and i think people could imagine doing it in their life. You can see that there is a revenge element as during the voice over we can see something dramatically has gone down.

Layout in final cut.

In final cut we had the bar at the bottom which allowed us to move the sounds, images and video footage around. We can see these on the thumbnails. This makes it easier to change it around. It is a very effective programme. sometimes there is more than one track these are used when there is overlay footage.

Brad, Sophie, David Callum Rough Cut.mov

Audience Feedback.
we recieved our audience feedback from our group peers and took on board what they said. we got told which bits were good and which bits we needed to improve. seeing the film on the big screen also pointed out to us as a group of what we needed to do, to improve our film further to get a better grade. watching our film on the bigger screen made us understand better and what conventions we as a group needed to put in and what conventions had already worked well.
one criticism we got on our film is that people didn't really know the plot line as it was a little bit ambigious we are going to take this on board and but non diagetic sound in so this will tell us what is going on in the storyline.